Lil Dono

To me, this book was NOT a Harry Potter book until they got to Hogwarts again. I understand that the last book had to be different and it was necessary ...

Cornelia Funke has her goods and bads. The Thief Lord is amazing. Has someone created a topic about that? InkHeart is a couple steps below amazing, but still good. The ...

Short to it's full potential :) The only thing that catches me is that it seems the first line is missing a syallable and maybe a comma after "Lest I ...

I love the first stanza the most; the rhyming is so precise and perfect! I found this poem incredibly sweet. Your parents will just watch in awe, As I prove ...

Indeed, I think it would do better as a short, descriptive prose. I like the last couple of lines, they wrap it up nicely. If you are going to keep ...

Thanks, all of you! I didn't think people would like it this much. :3 I personally feel that this is one of the better poems I've written, but considering my ...

Wow...that could be published. Perhaps you like the fear, The pain, the crime, the sin. I'm not sure but it seems to me like their should be a colon after ...

I'm no master at poetry, but I do know that it is rare that poems can be written to express their full meaning and feeling in just ten minutes. This ...

*sigh* For a long time, I loved the Pendragon books. And I still do love some of the time. But after reading them so often, I find they incredibly repetetive. ...

It took me a long time to actually finish Sabriel because I would start it with enthusiam but get bored and set it down. Finished Sabriel finally and thought it ...

When I first read the words "I loved you", my first thought was "Oh gawd, teenage breakup poem, nothing new" but I am so glad to say that minute I ...

Glass skin melts in the sunlight; Hmm...any particular reason you used "glass-like" instead of simple "glass"? I think using an implied metaphor instead of an implied simlie would start off ...

If I had to summarize this poem in a couple words, those unfortunate words would be: Unoriginal, Repetitive, TeenAngst. I can point out at least ten poems on this site ...

I look out to the window out to the sea, You and me going across what the mind can see, Over the moon I can touch the stars, The feeling ...

I stood in a hallway And glanced all around. Where was I? It might just be me, but "all" seems very unnecessary and in my opinion, makes it sound a ...